[Hyōgakure] Fubuki, Shiro - Technique list

[Shiro]

• Technique Name: [氷遁・ツバメ吹雪] Hyōton: Tsubame Fubuki (Ice Release: Swallow Snow Storm)
• Technique Type: Ninjutsu
• Technique Rank: D - Ranked
• Technique Action Cost: D-Rank:10 actions
  

• Technique Effect: This technique creates a cluster of ice needles in the shape of miniature swallows by freezing the air surrounding them (or existing sources of ice), which the user then launches at the opponent. These needles can change direction in midair and will maim the opponent with their sharp wings. This technique can be countered by Fire Release techniques, which in turn melts the ice.
• Rank Required: Genin

• Technique Name: [氷遁・雪の中で追跡] Hyōton: Yuki no naka de tsuiseki (Ice Release: Hunter in the snow)
• Technique Type: Ninjutsu
• Technique Rank: D - Ranked+
• Technique Action Cost: 10 action points for 3 initial posts (+2 for each additional post after where it is kept active)
  

• Technique Effect: After the necessary skills, the user releases their Hyōton chakra into the air that creates a small blizzard (or utilizes preexisting weather. The user will be able to use existing snowstorms or if it is raining, turn the rain into snow). Once the previous step has been completed, the user is capable of rapid movements through the flurries of snow. This allows the user to close the ground on, ambush, or escape from enemies that are within the storm itself. The size of the storm varies depending on the level of shinobi using it ( At genin the area will be around 6 acres). The storm however is not capable of moving, and enemies who escape from the area of the storm itself will find themselves free of it's freezing grasp.
• Rank Required: Genin+

• Technique Name: [魔鏡氷晶] Makyō Hyōshō (Demonic Mirroring Ice Crystal)
• Technique Type: Hijutsu (Fubuki Clan Technique)
• Technique Rank: D+ (Power scales with rank)
• Technique Action Cost: Initial cost of 15 action points, last for 6 posts. After 6 posts it is an additional 3 action points.
  

• Technique Effect: An abominable and tremendous ability, it was passed down only within the Fubuki clan. It is a technique wrapped up in many mysteries. It was said that no method in existence can defeat this technique. In an instant, multiple mirrors of ice are created around the enemy, reflecting nothing but the Fubuki shinobi using the technique. The opponent is trapped in a dome of twenty-one floating mirrors made out of ice. Twelve remain at ground level, eight float above the first twelve and angled towards the ground, and the final mirror is above the rest and facing the ground. Once the user has entered the mirrors, it's possible for them to move between the mirrors at exceedingly high speed levels. It's near impossible to follow attacks sent out from this incredible movement. As every mirror shows their reflection, one could say it's impossible to see all of the user's attacks. Even if the opponent tries to attack the real body, the Fubuki will have already moved to another mirror.
• Rank Required: Genin +
• Other Information: This technique is a Fubuki clan technique that has been passed down among inheritors of the Kekkei Genkai since their arrival in the Land of Frost. This technique is considered one of their signature techniques, and is incredibly powerful.

• Technique Name: [氷遁・氷岩堂無] Hyōton: Hyōgan Dōmu: Ice Release: Ice Rock Dome of Magnificent Nothingness
• Technique Type: Elemental Barrier Ninjutsu
• Technique Rank: D
• Technique Action Cost: 10 action points
  

• Technique Effect: After finishing the required handseals, the user freezes the air around them to create a protective dome around the user and anyone in their direct vicinity. This technique is capable of defending up to C - ranked techniques but is susceptible to many attacks simultaneously.
• Rank Required: Genin

• Technique Name: Hyōton: Jisarenhyō (Ice Release: Earthen Consecutive Chains of Ice)
• Technique Type: Ninjutsu
• Technique Rank: D - Ranked+
• Technique Action Cost: 10 action points
  

• Technique Effect: The user, through physical contact, causes ice particles to form on a target. If used on a living creature, the target will freeze to death unless they are able to mould chakra. By coating themselves with chakra and dedicating all their energy to keeping themselves warm, they can avoid death; if they use their chakra to perform a technique, they will start to rapidly freeze again. Targets who have a chakra level higher than the user are easily capable of dispelling this technique by overpowering it with their chakra.
• Rank Required: Genin+

[daiyu]

Please Note:  Any suggestion I make, if you do not agree with it, is up for discussion.

Technique Name: [氷遁・ツバメ吹雪] Hyōton: Tsubame Fubuki (Ice Release: Swallow Snow Storm)

Technique Type: Ninjutsu

Technique Rank: D - Ranked

Technique Action Cost: D-Rank:10 actions

Technique Effect: This technique creates a cluster of ice needles in the shape of miniature swallows by freezing the air surrounding them (or existing sources of ice), which the user then launches at the opponent. These needles can change direction in midair and will maim the opponent with their sharp wings. This technique can be countered by Fire Release techniques, which in turn melts the ice.

Rank Required: Genin

Do these only last one turn and approximately how many are there? I am pretty sure you can put how many you make in the post but what I am mostly concerned about is how how long they last.

Technique Name: [氷遁・雪の中で追跡] Hyōton: Yuki no naka de tsuiseki (Ice Release: Hunter in the snow)

Technique Type: Ninjutsu

Technique Rank: D - Ranked+

Technique Action Cost: 10 action points for 3 initial posts (+2 for each additional post after where it is kept active)

Technique Effect: After the necessary skills, the user releases their Hyōton chakra into the air that creates a small blizzard (or utilizes preexisting weather. The user will be able to use existing snowstorms or if it is raining, turn the rain into snow). Once the previous step has been completed, the user is capable of rapid movements through the flurries of snow. This allows the user to close the ground on, ambush, or escape from enemies that are within the storm itself. The size of the storm varies depending on the level of shinobi using it ( At genin the area will be around 6 acres). The storm however is not capable of moving, and enemies who escape from the area of the storm itself will find themselves free of it's freezing grasp.

Rank Required: Genin+

Accepted.

Technique Name: [魔鏡氷晶] Makyō Hyōshō (Demonic Mirroring Ice Crystal)

Technique Type: Hijutsu (Fubuki Clan Technique)

Technique Rank: D+ (Power scales with rank)

Technique Action Cost: Initial cost of 15 action points, last for 6 posts. After 6 posts it is an additional 3 action points.

Technique Effect: An abominable and tremendous ability, it was passed down only within the Fubuki clan. It is a technique wrapped up in many mysteries. It was said that no method in existence can defeat this technique. In an instant, multiple mirrors of ice are created around the enemy, reflecting nothing but the Fubuki shinobi using the technique. The opponent is trapped in a dome of twenty-one floating mirrors made out of ice. Twelve remain at ground level, eight float above the first twelve and angled towards the ground, and the final mirror is above the rest and facing the ground. Once the user has entered the mirrors, it's possible for them to move between the mirrors at exceedingly high speed levels. It's near impossible to follow attacks sent out from this incredible movement. As every mirror shows their reflection, one could say it's impossible to see all of the user's attacks. Even if the opponent tries to attack the real body, the Fubuki will have already moved to another mirror.

Rank Required: Genin +



Other Information: This technique is a Fubuki clan technique that has been passed down among inheritors of the Kekkei Genkai since their arrival in the Land of Frost. This technique is considered one of their signature techniques, and is incredibly powerful.

One thing I would suggest about this one is to initiate it would be the same and cost 15 AP and how long it stays, but I believe that it should cost for you to move mirrors.  It can either be something simple like 3 AP or even 2.  The reason I am saying 3 and I can be misunderstanding this since the system is new, however, to use the body flicker abilitly a speed requirement is 20 and this seems almost similar to that.  So this will make up for the 3 that you are missing.  

Also, can you explain what you mean by "Power scales with rank"

Technique Name: [氷遁・氷岩堂無] Hyōton: Hyōgan Dōmu: Ice Release: Ice Rock Dome of Magnificent Nothingness

Technique Type: Elemental Barrier Ninjutsu

Technique Rank: D

Technique Action Cost: 10 action points

Technique Effect: After finishing the required handseals, the user freezes the air around them to create a protective dome around the user and anyone in their direct vicinity. This technique is capable of defending up to C - ranked techniques but is susceptible to many attacks simultaneously.

Rank Required: Genin

I am okay with this one.  However, I would suggest giving it a durability stat or put something similar to your first ability you posted how it is weak against fire release.  I know you put that it is capable of defending up to C-Ranked, but there needs to be a way for your genin opponents to know that they breached through, by some other way then you saying it is breaking.  I would suggest a durability.  

Technique Name: Hyōton: Jisarenhyō (Ice Release: Earthen Consecutive Chains of Ice)

Technique Type: Ninjutsu

Technique Rank: D - Ranked+

Technique Action Cost: 10 action points

Technique Effect: The user, through physical contact, causes ice particles to form on a target. If used on a living creature, the target will freeze to death unless they are able to mould chakra. By coating themselves with chakra and dedicating all their energy to keeping themselves warm, they can avoid death; if they use their chakra to perform a technique, they will start to rapidly freeze again. Targets who have a chakra level higher than the user are easily capable of dispelling this technique by overpowering it with their chakra.

Rank Required: Genin+

Since you are a genin, and if you choose to keep this at genin level, I would have to say there needs to be a few edits for this one.  

• I would not put freeze to death.  Perhaps suffer from a high degree of frost bite in the area touched, but I do not believe it should be as severe death.  This way you are still dealing damage to them.  

• To me they will still be able to mold some of their chakra and be able to to use a technique. To me you would want them to do this, that way it would eat up their Action Points.  It would cost them atleast 5AP per turn to continually protect themselves from the attach as long as you are touching them.  I am assume that this technique is only effects the person while you are physically touching them and once you stop touching them it no longer effects them unless they did not protect against it.  I would suggest, clarifying that it is as long as you are touching them
• If you don't agree with these suggestions, please put it at a higher rank and more AP.